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Happiness is often considered difficult to define. Why is this? What factors determine happiness?

#happiness #factors
It is said that
happiness
 is one of the most significant feelings in
life
. Some
people
 think that it can be defined as wealth and material success
while
 others believe that it is emotions and
relationships
 between individuals,
that
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 is why it is very difficult to define. Because
,
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happiness
 can be defined in different ways and it is difficult to give any explanation
that is
 true for everyone.
However
, happy
people
 are those who achieve their goals and have good
relationships
 with family and
friends
. First of all, when you believe in your dreams and do everything to make them come true is the most fulfilling thing in
life
.
For example
, I have always wanted to study in the United Kingdom and at the moment I am preparing for IELTS and GMAT exams
and
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when I pass them I will go to university and I will be the happiest man in the world,
that
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 is why I do everything for my dream.
Secondly
, good
relationships
 with family and
friends
 are
also
 important for
happiness
. As for me, those
people
 are the most valuable individuals in my
life
. So, you can be rich, but if you do not have true
friends
 or you have bad relations with parents or brothers or sisters, you will not be joyful, because those are the most loyal
people
 who will help you with any problems and they will be with you forever, regardless of how much money you have. As an example, I want to mention something from my
life
. I had some issues with my job and I was close to being fired. So, I was very stressed and only my parents and
friends
 believed in me and came to my place to support me in that difficult situation.
Therefore
, I realised at that moment what true
relationships
 and
happiness
 are.
Overall
, I think
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 ability to keep clear perspectives and good
relationships
 with family and
friends
 are more essential factors than being wealthy and are a source of true
happiness
.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, consider exploring a wider range of ideas connected to happiness, and try to address potential counterarguments or perspectives different from your own. This will demonstrate an ability to engage critically with the topic and provide a more balanced response.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring paragraphs flow smoothly from one idea to the next. Additionally, clarify the structure of your essay by using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • complex
  • embrace
  • vary
  • definition
  • material possessions
  • achievements
  • personal values
  • relationships
  • self-fulfillment
  • psychological
  • physiological
  • genetics
  • predispositions
  • cultural
  • societal
  • perception
  • pursuit
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