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Band 4.5

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, people tend to like buying things with
a
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proper packaging.
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, the packaging that
produced
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 thousands in a day might need layers of
plastic
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.
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, it is agreed that
plastic
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 ranked as the most
rubbish
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 in the world
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 its long period to subside.
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, the over-consumption of
plastic
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 is threatening the state of
healthy
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 environment globally, resulting
a
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in a
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crisis that must
be tackle
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 immediately. The root cause of the unlimited
rubbish
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 production stems from the consumption of people
in
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on
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daily
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a daily
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 basis.
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 is when people order food from an online driver,
such
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 as GrabFood, the meal's packaging
need
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needs
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 a minimum
two
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of two
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 layers of
plastic
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, with a
plastic
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 plate, the spices are wrapped
with
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in
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plastic
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 bags,
plus
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 the cutlery that often made from
plastic
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.
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, it is believed that numerous individuals order their meals online every day,
increases
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which increases
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 the number of
junks
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junk
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.
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, the issue of trash can be solved in many ways, starting with the action
from
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 the government. The state, that has the ability to add or change the policy, may combat the large use of junks by adding the rules to minimize the usage of
plastic
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.
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, the government may raise awareness regarding the
dangerous
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 of the pile of
rubbish
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,
for
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is
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by
campaign
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campaigning
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 and
share
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sharing
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informations
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information
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.
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, the citizens may reduce their usage of trash. In conclusion, there is a crisis in
regards
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the
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to the
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 gigantic production of
rubbish
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. The issue of
junks
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junk
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endangered
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endangers
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 the environment.
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, the government may add a policy to
decreases
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decrease
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 the use of
plastic
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 and raise
the
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apply
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awareness about the danger of
rubbish
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.

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Task Achievement
Be sure to fully address both parts of the task prompt to improve task achievement. Your essay should expand on both the reasons for increased rubbish production and the specific actions governments can take. Adding more depth and detail to each point will help.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your ideas could be more effectively organized by using clearer topic sentences and more logical paragraphing. Each paragraph should contain one main idea and supporting details.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas throughout the essay. Use conjunctions, transition phrases, and topic sentences for better coherence.
Task Achievement
Include specific examples to enhance the main points and make your arguments more convincing.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • landfill
  • recycle
  • single-use products
  • waste management
  • regulatory measures
  • composting
  • biodegradable
  • environmental impact
  • incentives
  • sustainable practices
  • circular economy
  • zero waste
  • responsibility
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