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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend.In letter Give contact details for when you are you are away Give instructions about how to care for your pet Describe other household duties

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Dear Abid, I hope
this
 letter finds you in
a
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good health. I am writing in response to your agreement that you will take care of my
bangalow
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bungalow
Bangalow
 and a cat of mine
while
 I
will be
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am
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 on a tour. You will be happy to know that we all have made a plan to go
fora
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on fora
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 long trip where we will enjoy and see some beautiful places. I want to tell you some details which might be helpful during my picnic so that you can
aware
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 us about
accident
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the accident
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 situation. Here is my cell phone no:0300000000. You can call me any time when you want. I give you some
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 about my pet, as most of the time it stays asleep. Before 8 am it takes some milk and after 4 pm it eats chicken which has
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kept in the kitchen already
In addition
, you will have to do some other household work
such
 as collecting milk every morning, gardening, keeping the house clean, paying bills and so on. I urge that you will act upon my instructions and look after my home. I will try to return as soon as possible. Thank you for your cooperation. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Musab
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Task Response
Ensure you fully develop each paragraph with sufficient detail regarding the care of your pet and the household duties expected.
Coherence and Cohesion
Structure the letter clearly with an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion. Make sure the paragraphs flow logically from one to the next.
Suitable Writing Tone
Begin your letter with a more personal greeting, and compose a more engaging closing sentence. This can help make your letter sound more natural and friendly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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