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Band 3.5

Your landlord has increased the amount of rent you pay every month and you don’t find it appropriate. Write a letter to the landlord and in your letter, Explain why you are writing Describe why you find the increase inappropriate What you want to do now--

#landlord #amount #rent #month #don’t #now--
Dear Riaz, I hope that you will be very happy. I am writing
this
 letter to express my feelings that
you
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apply
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you have increased our rent. You know well that we have been living here for many years. There
are
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is
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 so
many works
Fix the agreement mistake
much work
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 I have to do
besides
 the payment of
house
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the house
a house
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. In the whole
city
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city,
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 I have
came
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come
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 to know that the fare of houses
appropriate
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is appropriate
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 as
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
you
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your
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 rent. I want to tell you about your home that there are few things which are about to reduce.
Instead
 of increasing
fare
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the fare
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 repairing some things will be the best option which should be done by you. I am looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Musab
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coherence cohesion
Use clear and unambiguous language when expressing your concerns and be direct in stating the reason for writing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and sentences within the paragraphs are well-connected.
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs: an opening statement, one for each main point, and a concluding paragraph.
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Thoroughly explain why you find the increase inappropriate, providing specific reasons and any supporting details.
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Clearly articulate your course of action or what solution you expect from the landlord.
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Adopt a tone that is polite yet firm, as you are making a reasonable request regarding the rent increase.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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