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Many people think that it would be beneficial to establish a single, global currency to make international trade and travel much easier. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Would a single currency cause any problems?

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There is no denying the fact that trading and travelling are crucial for our
life
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.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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purpose
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the purpose
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 of making travel and
trade
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 more smoothly, we should create a single
currency
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 to use for all the nations, there is an argument
tah
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that
 opposes it. In my opinion, I consider creating a
singal
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single
 global
currency
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 will be
nufair
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unfair
 for
smoe
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some
 countries.
To begin
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 with,
diversity
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the diversity
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 of
currency
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throuhout
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throughout
 the
world
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 is one of the most important factors that make
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world
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the world
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economic
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 stable. In other
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world
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words
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, because of the variety of the worth of currencies around the
world
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, the status of
econimoc
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economics
 increased over the years. In
addation
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addition
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of
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some countries
are depending
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depend
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 on the status of the
currency
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, a
singal
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single
 global
currency
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 will be
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a disatvantage
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disatvantage
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disadvantage
disadvantaged
 for them,
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, the economy of the countries that
linked
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link
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 their
currncy
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currency
 with a natural
element
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elements
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such
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 as
Kwait
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Kuwait
, Saudi
Araiba
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Arabia
, and Jordan will be
detroyed
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destroyed
 when we make a
singal
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single
 global
currency
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. Another point to consider, there are other solutions that can improve our travel and
trade
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 rather than establishing a
singal
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single
currency
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that enhancing the
trade
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 route and
decrasing
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decreasing
 the cost will have a
positave
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positive
 impact
in
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on
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 our
world
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.
Moreover
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, creating a new
administartion
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administration
 who
responsible
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is responsible
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on
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for
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 global
trade
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 and travel will be
benfical
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beneficial
 for our
world
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.
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, initiating a ministry who have the ability to create
a
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apply
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strict rols the prices for trading and travelling will enhance our
life
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lives
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. In conclusion, despite people having other
veiws
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views
. I believe that
esablishing
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establishing
 worldwide
currency
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 will destroy some nation's
economy
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economies
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. I suggest to government to support
eachother
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each other
 to find other solutions rather than creating a
singal
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single
currency
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.
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task achievement
It's crucial to ensure that your essay remains focused on the prompt provided. Your introduction should more clearly state your position on the topic and preview the points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas should be organized logically, with each paragraph focused on one main idea. Work on connecting your ideas internally within paragraphs and between them using appropriate transition words.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific, detailed examples. You touched on some potential problems with a single global currency but failed to develop these ideas fully with concrete examples or evidence.
task achievement
Make sure that you directly address all parts of the question. Discuss both the benefits and potential problems of a single global currency as the prompt asks, rather than primarily focusing on the problems.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has multiple grammatical errors and misspellings which can significantly distract from the clarity of your message. Proofreading your work before submission can greatly increase its readability and professionalism.
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