The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate five different types of mother tongues (Urdu, Chinese, English and

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) spoken by

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at Bakersfield Senior College in 1980 and 1990. Data is presented in percentage (%).

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, it is observed that the proportion of

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with English as their first language declined notably from 1980 to 1990,

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that of

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speaking Urdu as the mother tongue exhibited a reverse trend. There are no significant changes for those speaking Chinese and other languages in

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time period. The percentage of

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speaking English as their first language reduced drastically by 15% from 70% in 1980 to 55% in 1990.

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speaking Urdu showed a notable surge of 13% in ten years. Meanwhile, Chinese-speaking

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experienced a moderate increase of just 2% by the year 1990.

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those speaking other languages maintained a stable 6% during the study period.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory jon or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and gives your opinion.

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Any country should be able to sell goods to other countries without the restrictions of the government. Do you agree or disagree?

Band 7+: Many people in the music business feel that illegal music sites on the internet are a serious threat to the industry and more should be done to prevent them from operating. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?