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The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate five different types of mother tongues (Urdu, Chinese, English and
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) spoken by
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 at Bakersfield Senior College in 1980 and 1990. Data is presented in percentage (%).
Overall
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, it is observed that the proportion of
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 with English as their first language declined notably from 1980 to 1990,
whereas
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 that of
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 speaking Urdu as the mother tongue exhibited a reverse trend. There are no significant changes for those speaking Chinese and other languages in
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 time period. The percentage of
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 speaking English as their first language reduced drastically by 15% from 70% in 1980 to 55% in 1990.
In contrast
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,
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 speaking Urdu showed a notable surge of 13% in ten years. Meanwhile, Chinese-speaking
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 experienced a moderate increase of just 2% by the year 1990.
On the other hand
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 those speaking other languages maintained a stable 6% during the study period.

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