In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without playing. To waht extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In
this
contemporary era, there is an ongoing contention that society
would
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switch to online reading from printed media in
coming
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the coming
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time
. I am totally satisfied with the above notion and in
coming
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paragraphs would like to elaborate more with suitable examples.
To begin
with, cost is
one
of the major
reason
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reasons
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behind
this
issue as e-learning is
cheapest
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the cheapest
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among all the other modes of reading
whereas
one
need
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needs
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to invest
enormous
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an enormous
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amount of
money
to buy
this
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these
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books.
For example
, in Singapore
the
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paper is so expensive as
cost
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the cost
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of
one
tree is equal to
laptop
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the laptop
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.
Moreover
, papers are
also
polluting the environment because
one
needs to garbage the books
at the end
of
its
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use
however
,
this
step is not
affecting
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the atmosphere but
also
the
wastage
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waste
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of
money
as well. 
Furthermore
, sometimes the fonts are not
easy
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easily
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accessible for the readers and they need to focus more
while
reading which directly affects their eyes.
In addition
to
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it
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apply
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,online learning is
easy
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available at
one
click and
individual
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individuals
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do not need to go anywhere for
the
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apply
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search
of
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material which
is
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not
saves
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only saves
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money
but
also
the
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time
.
However
, there is no doubt virtual study is
easiest
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the easiest
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mode but there
is
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are
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more chances of getting fictitious data
due to
large
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the large
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amount of modifications by the online contenders. In conclusion,
the
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online
learnig
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learning
would be more beneficial for
the
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society in
coking
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time
due to
factors
such
as
money
,
time
and
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accessibility and so on but
one
cannot ignore the fact of wrong information on the internet.
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