Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?
Young
generation Add an article
The young
are
likely to live alone these days. One of the remarkable Change the verb form
is
reason
related to Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
this
tendency would be numerous
job alternatives abroad. Correct article usage
the numerous
This
essay will explain that living alone may lead to some drawbacks including depression or other stress related
diseases.
The main cause of why Add a hyphen
stress-related
people
tend to live alone is they are forced to move abroad to get better
salary. Thanks to the Add an article
a better
improvments
in technology, Correct your spelling
improvements
improvement
people
may apply numerous
occupancies irrespective of their own hometowns, or even countries. Mostly, teenagers are able to find a job, which offers better Change preposition
for numerous
wage
in another country. In order to build a strong foundation in their early 20s' they prefer to move Fix the agreement mistake
wages
another
location from their hometown, so they prefer to live alone. Since they live far away from their friends and relatives, Change preposition
to another
ans
Correct your spelling
and
also
they do not many friend
in their new location, it may seem reasonable to prefer to Change to a plural noun
friends
libe
by themselves. Correct your spelling
live
For example
, many new apartment blocks contains
mainly 1+1 condos, or studio flats, since men and women are likely to live alone Change the verb form
contain
instead
of with their mates; however
, in the past
the majority of homes were bigger compared to modern ones in order to attract Add a comma
past,
people
, who enjoy living with their friends or relatives.
This
phenomenon, unfortunately, results in some drawbacks among people
, and its negative impacts on individuals have been increasing lately. As people
get use
to Change the form of the verb
used
live
by themselves, they start to suffer from Change the verb form
living
the
sense of loneliness or being isolated . It is because they do not share their home with others, they spend the majority of their leisure time alone, in Correct article usage
a
compariton
with a man, who Correct your spelling
comparison
live
with his parents. Change the verb form
lives
Therefore
, they are struggling to find someone for talking
Change preposition
to talk
,
Change preposition
to, sharing
Correct word choice
and sharing
sharing
their senses, Wrong verb form
share
emotions
, which are presented Correct word choice
and emotions
the
most essential part of being a humanking by numerous doctors. As long as they are not able to share their time with others, individuals start to Change preposition
as the
affected
negatively at some point in their life. Add a missing verb
be affected
While
the process begins with anxiety, in case of the fact that victims can not be treated effectively at the inital
phase, it may result in major depression or more serious illnesses. Correct your spelling
initial
For instance
, the rate of suicides, which originate from falling into depression has been raising
dramatically, especially, among young adults these days.
Correct your spelling
rising
To conclude
, living alone has been becoming increasingly popular, and the major causes
is admitted Fix the agreement mistake
cause
job related
commitment. Add a hyphen
job-related
However
, this
change may affect people
's live
dramatically Replace the word
lives
due to
the sense of being far away from their loved ones, and can not share their time with others.Submitted by ilaydailday on
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