Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?

Young
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generation
are
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likely to live alone these days. One of the remarkable
reason
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reasons
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related to
this
tendency would be
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job alternatives abroad.
This
essay will explain that living alone may lead to some drawbacks including depression or other
stress related
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diseases. The main cause of why
people
tend to live alone is they are forced to move abroad to get
better
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a better
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salary. Thanks to the
improvments
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improvements
improvement
in technology,
people
may apply
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occupancies irrespective of their own hometowns, or even countries. Mostly, teenagers are able to find a job, which offers better
wage
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wages
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in another country. In order to build a strong foundation in their early 20s' they prefer to move
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location from their hometown, so they prefer to live alone. Since they live far away from their friends and relatives,
ans
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and
also
they do not many
friend
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friends
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in their new location, it may seem reasonable to prefer to
libe
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live
by themselves.
For example
, many new apartment blocks
contains
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mainly 1+1 condos, or studio flats, since men and women are likely to live alone
instead
of with their mates;
however
, in the
past
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the majority of homes were bigger compared to modern ones in order to attract
people
, who enjoy living with their friends or relatives.
This
phenomenon, unfortunately, results in some drawbacks among
people
, and its negative impacts on individuals have been increasing lately. As
people
get
use
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to
live
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living
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by themselves, they start to suffer from
the
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sense of loneliness or being isolated . It is because they do not share their home with others, they spend the majority of their leisure time alone, in
compariton
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comparison
with a man, who
live
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lives
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with his parents.
Therefore
, they are struggling to find someone
for talking
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to talk
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,
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to, sharing
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and sharing
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sharing
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their senses,
emotions
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and emotions
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, which are presented
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most essential part of being a humanking by numerous doctors. As long as they are not able to share their time with others, individuals start to
affected
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negatively at some point in their life.
While
the process begins with anxiety, in case of the fact that victims can not be treated effectively at the
inital
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initial
phase, it may result in major depression or more serious illnesses.
For instance
, the rate of suicides, which originate from falling into depression has been
raising
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rising
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dramatically, especially, among young adults these days.
To conclude
, living alone has been becoming increasingly popular, and the major
causes
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is admitted
job related
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commitment.
However
,
this
change may affect
people
's
live
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dramatically
due to
the sense of being far away from their loved ones, and can not share their time with others.
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