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The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The given chart illustrates the percentage of people in the UK who ate five servings of fruit and vegetables from 2001 to 2008. The units were measured in per cent and the
categories
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 were divided into
men
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, women and
children
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that all types of
categories
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 experienced a gradual increase between the initial
year
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 and
last
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year
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.
However
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, in the middle of the given period, all types reached the highest point before falling again. As the bar graph shows, the highest proportion led by women, stood at just above 20% in the initial
year
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. Afterwards, the figure increased gradually and reached the highest point in 2006 at approximately 35% before decreasing to around 30% in the final
year
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. Regarding another two
categories
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,
men
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 and
children
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, have a similar trend. In 2001, the percentage of
children
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 began at nearly 12% and
men
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 at 17%. In the following years, the figure in both of these
categories
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 remained unchanged until 2003,
then
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 the number started to grow considerably and reached a peak at 28% and 25% in 2007, respectively. In the
last
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year
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, the proportion both for
men
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 and
children
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 went down by 1%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, men, children, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Servings
  • Nutritional habits
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Fluctuations
  • Dietary choices
  • Health consciousness
  • Public health campaigns
  • Demographic differences
  • Statistical comparison
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Gender disparity
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