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When a country becomes richer, the natural environment will suffer. It is not possible for a country to both develop its economy and protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Many people
belived
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believe
believed
 that the natural
emvroment
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environment
will
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 suffer. it is not possible for a country to both develop its
economy
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 and protect the
environment
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.
Body paragraph 1
I agree with
this
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paint
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point
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 of view because if the
government
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 introduce
reasontable
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reasonable
polices
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policies
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, it will
protech
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protect
 the
environment
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at
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and at
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 the same time increase the
economy
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.in 2023 the
government
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 showed
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a slution
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slution
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solution
solutions
 increase
the
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economy
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 at the same time
protech
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protect
 the
envuionment
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environment
. The
government
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 said raw materials must
used
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energi
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energy
 and
do
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not release pollutants into the
environment
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. Avoid releasing toxic gases into the
environment
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 and circular
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economy
emconomy
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economic
 development
Conclusion
I agree with
this
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paint
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point
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 of view. Let`s both
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protect
protech
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protect
 the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 and increase the
economy
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 as the
government
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 has
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proposed
propsed
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proposed

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable development
  • economic growth
  • environmental degradation
  • industrial activities
  • pollution
  • renewable energy
  • conservation efforts
  • sustainable practices
  • eco-friendly technologies
  • environmental regulations
  • resource depletion
  • consumer demands
  • natural ecosystems
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