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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied pie chart illustrates the proportion of destination of the
students
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 who graduated from the university,
while
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 the given table represents the average monthly income of distinct types of employment for 5 years later.
Overall
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, as can be seen, full-time
work
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 was the most popular among
students
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,
while
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 the lowest was the individuals who both continued their postgraduate study and worked part-time.
Furthermore
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, private companies contain more low-salaried employees,
whereas
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 high-salaried people prefer being freelance consultants or working in the government sector.
To begin
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 with, half of the
students
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 chose full-time
work
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 after graduation, at around 52% of them.
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, the second and third largest selected options for
students
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 were part-time
work
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 and unemployment, 15% and 12% respectively. The figures for the part-time and postgraduate study were the less preferable way which constitutes just 5 per cent of all graduated
students
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.
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, the employees who earn less than 75 thousand dollars yearly mainly
work
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 in private companies, standing at 40% of all workers.
Whereas
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, middle and high-salaried individuals gaining more than 75 thousand dollars per year in the Anthropology industry contribute nearly 80% of the government sector and freelance consultants.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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