The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.
This
diagram illustrates the production of a carbonated drink. There are five main stages of the process, which
consists
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consist
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of
the
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water
cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, and packaging. The feedstock is namely the unfiltered
water
.
Firstly
, through filtration, the raw
water
will soften and
mixed
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with chemicals.
Secondly
,
resulting
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the resulting
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water
will enter the electric heaters
by
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the help of a pump before moving through the cooling pipe.
Thirdly
, an addition of carbon dioxide will carbonate the
water
and
then
transported
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to
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it to
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a mixing tank. In the mixing tank, additives
such
as colouring, syrup, and
flavor
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flavour
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, are fused with a stirring rod stuck in the tank. Fourthly, a filtration phase will be carried out, in which some of the carbonated drinks are categorized
to
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into
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bottles and others
to
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into
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cans. Fifthly, products will be packed into boxes before
sending
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it off to supermarkets by truck mobilization.
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