The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.
This
diagram illustrates the production of a carbonated drink.
There are five main stages of the process, which consists
of Correct subject-verb agreement
consist
the
Correct article usage
apply
water
cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, and packaging. The feedstock is namely the unfiltered water
.
Firstly
, through filtration, the raw water
will soften and mixed
with chemicals. Add a missing verb
be mixed
Secondly
, resulting
Correct article usage
the resulting
water
will enter the electric heaters by
the help of a pump before moving through the cooling pipe. Change preposition
with
Thirdly
, an addition of carbon dioxide will carbonate the water
and then
transported
Wrong verb form
transport
to
a mixing tank. In the mixing tank, additives Correct pronoun usage
it to
such
as colouring, syrup, and flavor
, are fused with a stirring rod stuck in the tank. Fourthly, a filtration phase will be carried out, in which some of the carbonated drinks are categorized Change the spelling
flavour
to
bottles and others Change preposition
into
to
cans. Fifthly, products will be packed into boxes before Change preposition
into
sending
it off to supermarkets by truck mobilization.Verb problem
being
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