the graph below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between march 1993 and march 1999. write at least 150 words

the graph below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between march 1993 and march 1999. write at least 150 words
the line graph gives information about the percentage of the unemployment
rates
in the
USA
and
Japan
from March 1993 to March 1999.
Overall
, The unemployment
rates
in
Japan
show a significant rise over the period,
However
, the
rates
in the
USA
experience
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a downward trend. The percentage of
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the work
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work
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workforce
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force
in
Japan
increases gradually to 4.4% in Mar 96,
then
it suddenly
decrease
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to 3.8 % between Mar 96 and Mar 97, and
then
it has a gradual increase to reach its peak value which is 5.25% between Mar 98 and Mar 99,
Finally
, it experiences a fall in
work
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workforce
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force
until the end of Mar 99. The
work
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workforce
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force
rates
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in the
USA
is much higher than that in
Japan
by 5% in Mar 93,
then
it declines to be almost the same rate as
Japan
between Mar 98 and Mar 99 ,
Moreover
, the rate of change in the
work
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workforce
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force
in
Japan
is much higher than that in the
USA
from Mar 93 to Mar 98.
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