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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the variety of
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activities for
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anthropology
graduates
 from the same university.
The
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 salaries
of
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them
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are
showed
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 in
dollars
 after five years of
work
. The chart shows six different
of
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work
 destinations. More than
half
 of them get
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full-time
work
.
Second
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place
 is filled by those who live
the
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part-time
work
. The next
place
,
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 is made by
them
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those
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 who live unemployed, they are twelve
percent
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per cent
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 of the
graduates
.
While
 the full-time postgrad study has
similar
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a similar
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 percentage with the unknown status, both of them get into 8% for each. The left percentage
filled
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is filled
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 by
them
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those
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 who do part-time
work
 and postgrad study at the same time. After five years of
work
, the salaries of anthropology
graduates
shows
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shown
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 in the table are
devided
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divided
 into
for
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categories.
Overall
, the highest salary is owned by
them
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those
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 who
work
 in
government
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the government
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sector
 (
half
 of them), followed by
freelance
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a freelance
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consultant
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consultants
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in
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at
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 40% and
also
 private
companies
in
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at
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 30%. Between 75000
dollars
 and below one hundred thousand
dollars
, there
is
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are
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 freelance
consultant
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consultants
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 who make the
most
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highest
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 percentage for about 40% followed by
government
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the government
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sector
 and private
sector
, 30% and 25% continuously. In the range of 50000 and 74999
dollars
, the private
companies
 owned the first
place
 with 35%,
while
 around
half
 of it
owned
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was owned
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 by freelance
consultant
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consultants
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 and
government
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the government
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sector
 with the same
amunt
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amount
. In the least range, about 25000-49999
dollars
,
ther
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there
is
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are
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 private
companies
owns
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that owns
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 the first
place
,
while
half
 of
10
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the 10
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%
owns
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are owned
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 by freelance consultants and
also
government
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the government
show examples
sector
. In conclusion, more than
half
 of anthropology
graduates
work
 as
full-time
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a full-time
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 worker
while
half
 of them who works in
government
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the government
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sector
have
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has
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 the highest range of salary, followed by freelance consultants with 75000-99000 and
also
 private
companies
 around 50000-74999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, dollars, work, half, place, government, sector, companies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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