The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How sugar is produced from sugar cane. The following diagrams illustrates the sugar producing form sugar cane with manufacturing process.
The following diagrams
illustrates
the Change the verb form
illustrate
sugar
producing
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production
form
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from
sugar
cane
with manufacturing
process.
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the manufacturing
Overall
, the whole procedures occur in seven different steps, including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice
, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying cooling method
. Fix the agreement mistake
methods
Moreover
, the process also
requires several mechines
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machines
such
as limestone
filter, evaporator, and centrifuging tool.
In terms of producing Correct article usage
a limestone
sugar
cane
, the first thing to do is growing
the plants which basically need 12-18 months. Wrong verb form
grow
Ater
that, Correct your spelling
After
sugar
cane
will be harvested either using the
tractor to reduce the Correct article usage
a
recidu
from its leaves or conducting Correct your spelling
residue
residual
the
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apply
manual
way by the farmers. The clear stems directly move into crushing machines Change the word
manually
then
pull the juice
out from the cane
which becomes the main ingridients
of Correct your spelling
ingredients
ingredient
sugar
.
Regarding the
next procedure requires a limestone filter in order to purify the Change preposition
The
juice
. Afterthat
, the purified Correct your spelling
After that
juice
pours into evaporator
which has been heated to get the syrup from it. Correct article usage
the evaporator
Besides
, the centrifuge mechines
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machines
also
will help the next step by separating sugar
crystals from syrup, finally
the drying and cooling methods are Add a comma
finally,
conducting
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conducted
sugar
cane
process completed.Submitted by adibah.r on
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