The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How sugar is produced from sugar cane. The following diagrams illustrates the sugar producing form sugar cane with manufacturing process.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane.

The following diagrams illustrates the sugar producing form sugar cane with manufacturing process.
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illustrates
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the
sugar
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producing
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form
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from
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sugar
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cane
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with
manufacturing
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process.
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, the whole procedures occur in seven different steps, including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying
juice
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, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying cooling
method
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methods
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.
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, the process
also
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requires several
mechines
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machines
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as
limestone
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a limestone
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filter, evaporator, and centrifuging tool. In terms of producing
sugar
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cane
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, the first thing to do is
growing
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the plants which basically need 12-18 months.
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that,
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cane
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will be harvested either using
the
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a
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tractor to reduce the
recidu
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residue
residual
from its leaves or conducting
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manual
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way by the farmers. The clear stems directly move into crushing machines
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pull the
juice
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out from the
cane
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which becomes the main
ingridients
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ingredients
ingredient
of
sugar
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.
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next procedure requires a limestone filter in order to purify the
juice
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.
Afterthat
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, the purified
juice
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pours into
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the evaporator
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which has been heated to get the syrup from it.
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, the centrifuge
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machines
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will help the next step by separating
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crystals from syrup,
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finally
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the drying and cooling methods are
conducting
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conducted
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to get the
sugar
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cane
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process completed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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