The diagram illustrates the life cycle process of frogs in a pond.

The diagram illustrates the life cycle process of frogs in a pond.
This
given diagram shows
that
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the levels in the life cycle of a
frog
in a pond.
Overall
, eggs are laid and hatch into
emryos
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embryos
which later develop into tadpoles and after that, change to adult frogs. In the beginning, eggs are laid in a pond.
Then
frogspawns
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frogspawn
frog spawns
frogspawn's
develop into
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an embryo
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embryo
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and after that,
embyo
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embryo
develops into tadpoles. In the next step, the
frog
's front
legs
start breaking through. After, the
frog
slowly begins to step into life.
Some time
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after its side
legs
break out,
he
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starts
of
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pulmonary breathing in its lungs. After these stages, it gradually approaches perfection.
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also
, the
frog
emerges from the process in the water to the surface.
Subsequently
, its other organs
also
develop and slowly approach the verge of becoming a real
frog
. Its tail shortens and its arms and
legs
are noticeably swollen. In the final step, in the process of growth, the attached
legs
and hands are opened and his size increases, and during
this
process
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his internal organs
also
develop fully.
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