In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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world
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Introduction
Ensure that your introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the views you will discuss. It is also beneficial to hint at your own view in the introduction to set the stage for the conclusion.
Coherence
Aim to include a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas more smoothly, such as 'however', 'nevertheless', 'for instance'.
Cohesion
Each paragraph should have one clear main idea, supported by detailed examples. Develop your examples further to strengthen your argument.
Task Achievement
Make sure to provide a balanced discussion of both views before stating your opinion. It is important to dedicate roughly equal space to each viewpoint.
Conclusion
Your conclusion should summarize both sides of the argument and clearly state your opinion, providing a sense of closure to the essay.
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