The chart shows the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The results of a recent survey into the causes of poor School attendance in the UK.
The pie chart depicts the
up to date
information about the major sources of the students’ bad presence in England. Add a hyphen
up-to-date
Overall
, both parents working is the most vital factor that influences learners’ abominable coming to the class of the four other factors, lack of school discipline, peer group pres Sure, bullying and upbringing respectively. Upbringing gives
the Verb problem
is
last
contribution
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contributor
of
low classroom participation.
Both parents working is the Change preposition
to
up most
cause with just under half, forty Correct your spelling
upmost
percentagewise
supporting the laziness of attending the learning process in the class. Correct your spelling
percentwise
On the other hand
, the application of school discipline is still lack
and it supplies above Change the verb form
is still lacking
quarter
per Correct article usage
a quarter
cent
.
The other elements
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element
are
peer group pressure, bullying reached Correct subject-verb agreement
is
precise
quarter per Correct article usage
a precise
cent
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per cent
that
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apply
lead
to the absence of class instruction. Both elements gain fifteen per Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
cent
. The lowest one is coming from the parents in
bringing up their children. Change preposition
apply
Although
its effect does not seem significant however
it is also
appointed in the displayed data with just under quarter
per Correct article usage
a quarter
cent
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