The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of men and women
workers
participating different
sectors in Change preposition
in different
country
A and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
B
.
Overall
, the vast majority of male and female workers
are working in service
occupations
in country
A and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
B
. While
the second-highest participation for workers
in country
A is agricultural
Change preposition
in agricultural
jobs
, only a minority of people is
working in agricultural Correct subject-verb agreement
are
occupations
in country
B
.
In country
A, just over half of the total male workers
involve
in Wrong verb form
are involved
service
jobs
and nearly a third of male workers
involve
in agricultural Wrong verb form
are involved
occupations
. The proportion of female workers
participating service
Change preposition
in service
jobs
is nearly half and 43% of females are working in agricultural jobs
. The proportion of men working in industrial occupations
is almost twice Correct pronoun usage
that as
Change preposition
of
as
female Change preposition
of
workers
, exhibiting 15% of the total male workers
.
In country
B
, the proportions of males and females working in service
jobs
are dominating the remaining sectors with 65% and just under 90% respectively. While
almost a third of male workers
participate in industrial occupations
, this
fraction for female workers
is just over a tenth. Only minor
Correct article usage
a minor
fractions
of men and women are working in the industry sector.Fix the agreement mistake
fraction
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, country, b, service, occupations, jobs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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