The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of men and women
workers
participating
different
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in different
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sectors in
country
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countries
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A and
B
.
Overall
, the vast majority of male and female
workers
are working in
service
occupations
in
country
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countries
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A and
B
.
While
the second-highest participation for
workers
in
country
A is
agricultural
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in agricultural
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jobs
, only a minority of people
is
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are
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working in agricultural
occupations
in
country
B
. In
country
A, just over half of the total male
workers
involve
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are involved
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in
service
jobs
and nearly a third of male
workers
involve
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are involved
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in agricultural
occupations
. The proportion of female
workers
participating
service
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in service
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jobs
is nearly half and 43% of females are working in agricultural
jobs
. The proportion of men working in industrial
occupations
is almost twice
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that as
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of
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as
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of
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female
workers
, exhibiting 15% of the total male
workers
. In
country
B
, the proportions of males and females working in
service
jobs
are dominating the remaining sectors with 65% and just under 90% respectively.
While
almost a third of male
workers
participate in industrial
occupations
,
this
fraction for female
workers
is just over a tenth. Only
minor
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a minor
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fractions
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fraction
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of men and women are working in the industry sector.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, country, b, service, occupations, jobs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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