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The tables show how many international students studies in Canada and the United States by county of orign

The tables show how many international students studies in Canada and the United States by county of orign
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The tables give information on the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 in
Canada
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 and the
USA
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 based on their nationality in 2002 and 2003.
Overall
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, the
USA
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 had a significantly larger total
number
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 of international
students
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 than
Canada
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 did in both years, but there was a comparably higher percentage of increase in the figures for foreign
students
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 in
Canada
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, with the
number
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 of
Chinese
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students
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 showing the largest rise between the two years. It is
also
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 clear that the preponderance of international
students
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 was
Chinese
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 in
Canada
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,
while
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 it was Indians who outnumbered the other nationalities in the
USA
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 and were
also
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 the only nationality to follow a falling trend. In 2002, the
figure
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 for
Chinese
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students
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 led the chart at 5400, closely followed by 5000 Americans,
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 there were only 2100 Indians studying in
Canada
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, all of which
totaled
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totalled
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 59,870 international
students
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. In the next year, the total
figure
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equaled
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equalled
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 70,004
students
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 from overseas, a 17
percent
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per cent
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 increase from the previous year’s
figure
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, with China and India experiencing the most significant changes of 45% and 35%, rising to 7850 and 2835, respectively. The
number
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 of
students
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 from the
USA
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 increased only by 9
percent
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per cent
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, which translates to 450 more
students
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, or 5450 in total. The figures for international
students
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 in the
USA
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 recorded smaller variations, but their numbers were dramatically higher than those who studied in
Canada
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 between 2002 and 2003. There was a 2% increase in the total
number
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 of foreign
students
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 in America, from 581 600 to 592 230, roughly 8 or 9 times as many as that
of
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in
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Canada
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. In 2002, Indian
students
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 amounted to
200 000
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200,000
, more than half of the total
figure
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, with
Chinese
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 as the distant runner-up (
110 000
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110,000
) and Canadians at the
last
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 spot, at
31 000
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31,000
.
While
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 the
number
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 of Indian
students
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 dropped by 9% to 182 000 in 2013, the other two countries grew slightly: China by 6% to 116 600 and
Canada
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 by 7% to 33 170.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, canada, usa, chinese, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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