Smart phones and other similar electronic gadgets have reduced the contact between friends. Discuss how far you agree with this statement.
There is an argument that
smart
Correct your spelling
smartphones
phones
such
as iPhone's
and Galaxy's have decreased Change noun form
iPhones
the
communication between Correct article usage
apply
friends
. I totally disagree with this
statement, because mobile phones
and similar electronic devices are offering social media platforms and phone
call opportunities which provides a great environment to contact with other people
.
There are different variations of social media platforms that enable to
interact with strangers Correct pronoun usage
one to
and
close Correct word choice
apply
friends
or even celebrities. These applications provide a digital infrastructure to simulate real life
interactions, and Add a hyphen
real-life
therefore
, people
can speak and send a message to others in a few seconds. With the help of this
quick interaction, people
can speak more often with their friends
. To illustrate this
, Instagram users are sending a lot of videos and photographs to their friends
and they can discuss different digital materials with their contacts on this
application.
The other gift of smart phones
are offering is instant phone
calls which eases to talk or ask something without a face-to-face interaction. Many people
prefer these kinds of interactions because people
do not have to prepare to go to outside to talk with someone, and they can easily ask their urgent situations. For example
, in the UK a person interact
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interacts
more
than a hundred Change preposition
with more
people
through these phone
calls which is extremely hard to interact this
number of Change preposition
with this
people
in rural places, and most people
admit that they can easily speak with their friends
with the help of phone
calls without meeting in a cafe.
In conclusion, phone
calls and social media platforms are different features of smart phones
and similar devices, and I believe, these opportunities improve the communication between friends
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Include more detailed and specific examples to support your point of view. Rather than providing general statements, demonstrate the impacts of smartphones and similar devices on communication with evidence or specific anecdotes.
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