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In recent years, Kuwait has seen a significant number of new cafes. What effect has it had on Kuwait’s economy and society?

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Nowadays,
coffee
 has been selected as a primary drink for the majority
especially
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 in
Kuwait
. It has effects on both the resident and their financial incomes. In
this
essay
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 I will present examples of the demand
of
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for
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coffee
 in
Kuwait
 and the impact on its
economy
. Convincing arguments can be made that
Kuwait
 has a countable number of people
which
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who
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 are
easily
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 to reach.
As a result
, any trend
drinks
 or projects will be noticed.
However
,
coffee
 shops that serve black coffees
such
 as American
coffee
, V60 and drip
coffee
 have a special feature called notice (mixture of multiple fruits)
encourages
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that encourages
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 and attracts people to try it.
Furthermore
, these types of
coffee
 create a great mood and climate for those
how
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who
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 used to work at
early
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an early
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 time in the morning.
Moreover
,
the
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black
drinks
 provide a significant amount of caffeine that
increase
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increases
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 mental health so dramatically.
For instance
,
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the
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soft
drinks
 with black
coffee
 will eliminate bad habits and issues that other
drinks
 will
causes
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cause
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. Research has found that individuals are consuming 2 to 3 cups a day and ultimately, they fuel
Kuwait
’s
economy
 so significantly.
Also
, over purchase on these
drinks
 and
treat
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 them as an essential factor will
obtain
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create
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 a new path for the
economy
 like creating a new manufacturing.
For example
, Toby’s
estate
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one
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 of the most famous
coffee
 shops in
Kuwait
 and
in
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it
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 has been established in several different countries starting from
Kuwait
.
Last
 but not least, an enormous academic school for creating
coffee
 has been released in
Kuwait
, and everyone all over the world
are
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exciting
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excited
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 to
spent
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spend
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 their time in
Kuwait
 just to test
Kuwait
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Kuwait's
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 olden
drinks
. In conclusion,
Kuwait
’s administration played a prominent strategy in order to improve the
economy
 of
Kuwait
 by
collaborate
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 with the society.
Finally
, both of them
helps
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help
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 to
impacts
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impact
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in
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apply
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Kuwait
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Kuwait's
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 future in
positive
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a positive
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 direction.
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure your essay fully addresses the prompt by discussing both the economic and societal effects of the new cafes in Kuwait. Provide a balanced analysis that explores these effects in depth with specific examples and clear explanations.
Coherence & Cohesion
For a higher coherence and cohesion score, organize your essay into clear paragraphs each with a central idea. Use linking words effectively to connect ideas and make sure each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. You should also have a clear introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your overall position.
Task Achievement
Enhance your task response by addressing all parts of the task. The essay should cover both the economic and social impacts comprehensively. Avoid straying from the topic by discussing irrelevant details. Back up your points with concrete examples and details that are directly related to the effects on Kuwait's economy and society.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve the coherence of your essay, maintain consistency in the presentation of your argument throughout. Avoid going off-topic, and ensure your examples are directly related to the main points you're making about the impact of coffee culture on Kuwait's economy and society.
Coherence & Cohesion
In your essay's development, focus on providing more detailed, relevant examples that support your arguments about the influence of new cafes on Kuwait. This can help you score higher in supporting your main points.

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