The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the price of exports in different categories in one country between 2015 and 2016. The table represents
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of percentage changes in each category in both years.
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clearly can be seen that petroleum
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were the
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export in both years. In terms of percentage, all four categories increased except gems and jewellery. In 2015, petroleum
products
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started from just above 60 billion
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and
then
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slightly increased to approximately 63
million
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dollars
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.
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similar trend showed engineered goods which accounted for 57 billion
dollars
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at the beginning of exportation and
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up with just about 62
million
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dollars
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.
Gems
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and
jewerelly
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jewellery
category had an opposite trend
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going down from 44
million
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dollars
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, in 2015, to just above 40
million
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dollars
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in the final year. The least
products
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were first exported in agricultural
products
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which ranged between approximately 31 and 33 billion
dollars
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and second in textiles with a rapid growth from almost 25
million
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dollars
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to just above 31
million
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dollars
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. The least
export earned
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textile category had a significant
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number of rice
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rice
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rise
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in the percentage of changes in values, which accounted for 15.24%.
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biggest section that experienced
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sharply
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growth trend is engineered
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with
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proportion of 8.5%. Petroleum
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' price was bigger than
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the previous
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year
for
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3%. Agricultural
products
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' value almost remained unchanged with growth, only 0.81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, dollars, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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