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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the proportion of the people who consume in
Cambodi
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Cambodia
,
Poland
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,
Egypt
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 and
Mexico
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 on Basic ingredients,
such
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 as
wheat
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, maize and
rice
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. The data usage
Calories
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 per
day
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 indicators.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are varied preferences among the people in four countries, at Combodi, the majority prefer
Rice
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,
Poland
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 and
Egypt
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 for
Wheat
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,
then
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Mexico
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 for Maize.
To begin
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 with the population in
Cambodi
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Cambodia
,
they
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apply
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take
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takes
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 a significant
amount
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 of
rice
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 on a daily basis at 1445
calories
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 per
day
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,
however
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, the other foods just take less than ten per
cents
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cent
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 of
wheat
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 proportion. In
Mexico
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, a lot of people choose
Meize
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 as their main nutrient, accounting for 1083
calories
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 per
day
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.
Moreover
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,
Wheat
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 intake is just around one-fourth of
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meize
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maize
 and a small
amount
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 who consume
Rice
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 in
Mexico
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. Moving to
Poland
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 and
Egypt
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, they have popular choices for
Wheat
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 as their main ingredient.
This
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 number accounted for 865
calories
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 per
day
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 intake in
Poland
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 and 1095 in
Egypt
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.
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, the two nations have different preferences for the second and third meals,
whereas
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,
Poland
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 goes for
Rice
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 a tiny
amount
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 and no one eats
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meize
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maize
 in that country.
Furthermore
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,
Egypt
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 has a similar
amount
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 of
Rice
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 and
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Meize
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Maize
 Consumption, around half number from their
wheat
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 intake.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poland, egypt, mexico, wheat, rice, calories, day, amount, meize with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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