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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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The chart above illustrates the number of
hours
 that teachers spent in different
schools
 across 4 countries in 2001. At a glance, The United States of America led the data in all of the education levels given in the chart. In teaching
the
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primary school, teachers in
Iceland
 spent the least amount of
time
 at less than 600
hours
,
while
 teachers in the US spent the most at 750
hours
.
This
 phenomenon
also
 happened to the teaching
hours
 in Lower Secondary
Schools
, where
Iceland
 had the least
hours
 to spend at a slight difference from its teaching
time
 for Elementary
Schools
 with just less than 50
hours
 difference.
Meanwhile
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 the US had the most
time
 spent on Lower Secondary
schools
 compared to other countries. For the
time
 spent on teaching the upper secondary
schools
, The US dominated at almost 1200
hours
,
whereas
 Japan spent the lowest
hours
 at 700. The other 2 countries (Spain and
Iceland
) almost had the same amount of
time
 spent around 900
hours
,
altough
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although
at
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 the end,
Iceland
 spent more than Spain.
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