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People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter: - describe the problems; - explain how it is affecting people; - say what the company should do to help.

#people #area #internet #connection #company
Dear Mr. My name is Frank, I am working at the STB company we have produced a new smart Hoover which will help with cleaning
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. In our company have a huge problem with
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. The internet has not been working for three days, we cannot work. Three days ago was a heavy rain with a thunderstorm. I think it becomes a case reason why
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 does not work. It gives us a huge impact
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 our company. I beg you to help with
this
 problem. Could you send
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 which fix it
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 Thank you in advance. I invite you to come
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 our new
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 opening next week on Monday. We will be waiting for you.
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 faithfully Frank
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Greeting and Closing
Start with appropriate salutation and ensure to close your letter properly with suitable signing off like 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully'.
Logical Structure and Single Idea Per Paragraph
The letter should be organized in clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single point: one for the description of the problem, one explaining the impact, and one suggesting what the company should do.
Task Achievement
Ensure you fully address all three points in the prompt: describe the problems, explain the impact on people, and specify what action you want the company to take. Expand on each point and give relevant details.
Suitable Writing Tone
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter, suitable for correspondence with a company, and avoid informal language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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