The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.
The table illustrates staple food intake, namely
rice
,
wheat
, and
maize
, from four varied countries.
Overall
, it can be seen that Egypt ranks first among other states in terms of its calorie consumption,
while
Poland
claimed
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to be the lowest in caloric utilization. Looking through the details,
wheat
has been the main staple food of Egypt, specifically 1095
calories
/
day
.
This
fact makes both the daily
rice
and
maize
intake of its country stand roughly half of the
wheat
(501
calories
/
day
and 578
calories
/
day
).
On the other hand
, Polan
rank
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ranks
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last
of
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in
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food consumption among others.
However
, there is a huge gap between the level of
calories
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usage.
Wheat
consumed by Poland inhabitants up to 865
calories
/
day
,
while
rice
nearly touched 20
calories
per
day
and merely zero for
maize
usage. Mexico and
Cambodi
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Cambodia
both reflect
an
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the
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opposite
for
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of
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each other.
Consumption
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The consumption
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level of
rice
in
Cambodi
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Cambodia
have
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has
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reached the number 1445 (
calories
/
day
),
makes
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making
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it the highest carbs intake,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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maize
has been Mexico’s way to
fulfill
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fulfil
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the
starve
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starving
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with the number 1083 (
calories
/
day
).
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