The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.
The table illustrates staple food intake, namely
rice
, Use synonyms
wheat
, and Use synonyms
maize
, from four varied countries.
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Overall
, it can be seen that Egypt ranks first among other states in terms of its calorie consumption, Linking Words
while
Poland Linking Words
claimed
to be the lowest in caloric utilization.
Looking through the details, Wrong verb form
claims
wheat
has been the main staple food of Egypt, specifically 1095 Use synonyms
calories
/Use synonyms
day
. Use synonyms
This
fact makes both the daily Linking Words
rice
and Use synonyms
maize
intake of its country stand roughly half of the Use synonyms
wheat
(501 Use synonyms
calories
/Use synonyms
day
and 578 Use synonyms
calories
/Use synonyms
day
). Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Polan Linking Words
rank
Correct subject-verb agreement
ranks
last
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of
food consumption among others. Change preposition
in
However
, there is a huge gap between the level of Linking Words
Use synonyms
calories
usage. Change the noun form
calorie
Wheat
consumed by Poland inhabitants up to 865 Use synonyms
calories
/Use synonyms
day
, Use synonyms
while
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rice
nearly touched 20 Use synonyms
calories
per Use synonyms
day
and merely zero for Use synonyms
maize
usage.
Mexico and Use synonyms
Cambodi
both reflect Correct your spelling
Cambodia
an
opposite Correct article usage
the
for
each other. Change preposition
of
Consumption
level of Add an article
The consumption
rice
in Use synonyms
Cambodi
Correct your spelling
Cambodia
have
reached the number 1445 (Change the verb form
has
calories
/Use synonyms
day
), Use synonyms
makes
it the highest carbs intake, Wrong verb form
making
meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
maize
has been Mexico’s way to Use synonyms
fulfill
the Change the spelling
fulfil
starve
with the number 1083 (Replace the word
starving
calories
/Use synonyms
day
).Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, wheat, maize, calories, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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