The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.
The table illustrates staple food intake, namely
rice
, wheat
, and maize
, from four varied countries.
Overall
, it can be seen that Egypt ranks first among other states in terms of its calorie consumption, while
Poland claimed
to be the lowest in caloric utilization.
Looking through the details, Wrong verb form
claims
wheat
has been the main staple food of Egypt, specifically 1095 calories
/day
. This
fact makes both the daily rice
and maize
intake of its country stand roughly half of the wheat
(501 calories
/day
and 578 calories
/day
). On the other hand
, Polan rank
Correct subject-verb agreement
ranks
last
of
food consumption among others. Change preposition
in
However
, there is a huge gap between the level of calories
usage. Change the noun form
calorie
Wheat
consumed by Poland inhabitants up to 865 calories
/day
, while
rice
nearly touched 20 calories
per day
and merely zero for maize
usage.
Mexico and Cambodi
both reflect Correct your spelling
Cambodia
an
opposite Correct article usage
the
for
each other. Change preposition
of
Consumption
level of Add an article
The consumption
rice
in Cambodi
Correct your spelling
Cambodia
have
reached the number 1445 (Change the verb form
has
calories
/day
), makes
it the highest carbs intake, Wrong verb form
making
meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
maize
has been Mexico’s way to fulfill
the Change the spelling
fulfil
starve
with the number 1083 (Replace the word
starving
calories
/day
).Submitted by hunnyfieddd on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, wheat, maize, calories, day with synonyms.
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