The chart and table below given information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparasions where irrelevant

The chart and table below given information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparasions where irrelevant
The pie chart and table pictured the percentage of
travelers
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at the specific vacation resort and some information about the activity attractions. It can be seen that
Europe
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and United States of America citizens dominate the other two regions as tourists.
Moreover
, Asians and Americans are mostly choosing hotels for similar
activity
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activities
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, which is sightseeing,
while
Europeans and other tourists from varied continents went wild by choosing camping or caravan as their inn
due to
their expressive activities. Reflected from the pie chart, European visitors took
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first place in terms of
traveling
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to Australia with
the
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a
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number of nearly 40%, followed by Americans just 2
percent
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below the European average, leaving marginally Asians and other regions of tripper with
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percentage of merely 18% and 10%. Moving on to the table served, American and Asian foreigners chose hotels with a range of 4 to 5 stars as their main holiday lodgement
due to
sightseeing as their tourist
attractions
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of choice that took 1 to 2 weeks.
In contrast
, the Europeans and other regions picked camping or caravan to stay throughout the visitation period (merely between 16 to 10 days) considering their
tourists
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tourist
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destinations that are mostly outdoor-related activities,
such
as swimming
or
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sunbathing and surfing.
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