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The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps depict the transformation of a college from the present to 2020.
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, the college is undergoing substantial changes, notably the removal of a footpath and garden to expand the
car
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park
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 and
campus
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. At present, there is a T-shaped footpath traversing the school, connecting the garden,
car
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park
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, and main road. On the right
side
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 stands the school
campus
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,
while
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 on the left
side
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 is a
car
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park
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, accommodating a maximum of four cars. At the walkway's end lies a bus stop situated at the back of the
campus
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, adjacent to the main road. Looking from the entrance, the right-hand
side
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 hosts a lunch area and two classrooms,
while
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 the left-hand
side
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 comprises a classroom, a reception, and a library at the
campus
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's rear. A toilet is located at the hallway's end, next to the library. In the future, the garden and footpath will be removed to expand the
campus
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 and add two more
car
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park
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 spaces. The school entrance will shift
to
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in
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 the opposite direction, closer to the bus stop.
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,
campus
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 renovations are planned. On the right-hand
side
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, the lunch area will be resized to incorporate a shop where students can purchase stationery. The reception will move to the
center
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centre
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 of the hallway, opposite the main entrance, creating space for three new classrooms. The toilet will
relocate
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be relocated
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 to the opposite
side
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. Notably, the bus stop remains unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, campus, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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