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The avarage standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future now. to what extend do you agree or dis agree with this statement?

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Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about
health
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 and whether it is going to improve or not. In my opinion, I think that
people
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 will become unhealthier in the
future
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 than they are now. There are many reasons that support the idea of
people
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 becoming unhealthy in the
future
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.
Firstly
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, one reason is that of
food
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.
People
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 tend to eat more fast
food
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 nowadays. They tend to treat themselves with sweets and chocolate whenever they want.
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 appears to be because
people
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 are busier now than they used to be. So,
people
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 don't have a chance to cook or even learn the art of cookery.
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, having a lot of unhealthy
food
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 can lead to obesity and it could be a serious issue in the
future
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. Another reason is that
technology
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 is developing
everyday
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. Young
people
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 enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices.
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 has a negative impact on their
health
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, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long hours looking at a screen can lead to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason is that laziness is a big issue. Different forms of
exercise
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 might disappear in the
future
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 because
people
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 don't like sports.
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,
people
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 prefer spending most of their time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. Other
people
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 might disagree and say that
health
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 will improve in the
future
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. They believe that new sports and new ways to
exercise
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 will appear in the
future
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.
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, I don't think it can happen since the majority of
people
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 spend less time outdoors.
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, other
people
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 believe that
technology
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 will try and help
people
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 improve their
health
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.
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, there have been some games released on the Wii console that
makes
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people
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exercise
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 but
technology
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 is developing more in a negative way.
For instance
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, many
phoneb
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phone
phones
 industries are developing new applications
everyday
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 and today's generation likes to follow every trend.
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 prevents
people
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to go
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from going
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 outside to
exercise
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. They like to spend more time on the internet downloading new programmes or reading
gossips
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gossip
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 about
celebraties
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celebrities
.
This
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 affects
people
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's
health
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 badly. In conclusion, I believe that
people
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's
health
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 is affected negatively by fast
food
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,
technology
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 and sports and it will be a problem in the
future
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.
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