■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart below shows British
people
rates Change noun form
people's
giving
Change preposition
of giving
money
to charity
by age
range
in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, British people
along their age
range
showed an upward trend in both years
1990 and 2010, However
, there were some fluctuations, although
in 1990 and 2010, people
age
ranged from 18 to 25 years
old that gave money
to charity
had a lower rates
, it was higher for Correct the article-noun agreement
lower rates
a lower rate
people
above 65 years
old.
In 1990, British people
that gave money
to charity
with age
ranged from 18 to 25 Fix the agreement mistake
ages
years
old were about 17% being
higher than in 2010 by approximately 10%, Unnecessary verb
apply
then
it rose to about 32% from age
Correct article usage
the age
range
26 to 35,and then
it continued to increase as the age
range
increased as well,
until it reached its peak value for about 42 % for Remove the comma
apply
age
range
36-50 ,however
it declined to be around 32% at Add a comma
however,
age
above 65 years
old.
In 2010, people
ranged from 18 to 25 years
old were about 7% who gave money
to the
Correct article usage
apply
charity
, then
it continued to increase as the age
range
increased as well, until it reached its peak value for
about 37 % for Change preposition
of
age
Correct article usage
the age
range
51-65 ,however
, it declined to be around 35% at age
above 65 years
old.Submitted by mohamedicdl175 on
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