The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The information about the life
expectency
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expectancy
and fatality
rate
of Switzerland during the
year
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1970 to 2020 has been
portry
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portrayed
by
United
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the United
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Nation
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statistics bar graph. The data has been
calibarated
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calibrated
in
millions
.
Overall
it can be seen that birth
rate
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rates
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are showing
longitudinal
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a longitudinal
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increase in subsequent years. To
beign
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begin
with, In
year
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1975,
born
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the birth
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rate
of people
were
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was
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marked at around 1.2
millions
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million
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,
while
the mortality
rate
was depicted
around
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1 million. After that, in
year
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the year
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1985,
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the
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death
rate
was seen in reverse
prapotional
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proportional
however
, the number of
new born
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newborn
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were remain
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were remained
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constant. There was a dramatic
increased
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manifested in the
rate
of death in Switzerland, which accounted highest 1.4 million in the
year
1995
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compared
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to any other
year
. In the same
year
population growth
also
has
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started
upward
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an upward
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trend. There is a drastic
increased
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menifested
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in the
rate
of birth in Switzerland, it comprised of 1.5 to 3
millions
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million
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between 2005
to
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and
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2025.
On the other hand
, a measurable
down fall
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is seen in the
aging
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poplulation
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population
in subsequent years, which dropped by 1.5 million to 0.5
millions
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million
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between
the
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apply
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2005 to 2025.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, year, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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