The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture displayed here is
an information
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information
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about the
birth
and
death
rates in Switzerland from
year
1970 to 2020 from United Nations statistics. The graph shown has 2 bar charts
on
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for
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each
year
throughout
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from
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1975 to 2025.
On
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the picture, the red chart shows the
birth
rate
, and the light blue chart shows the
death
rate
on
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the country.
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1975, the starting
year
, the
birth
rate
displays
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1.2
million
and the
death
rate
displays
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was
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1
million
.
On
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the following years, the improvement
remain
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stagnant
to
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at
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1.7
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a 1.7
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milion
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million
of
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in
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birth
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the birth
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rate
and 1.5
million
of
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in
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death
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the death
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rate
by the
year
1995.
On the other hand
, 10 years later,
on
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year
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the year
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2005
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2005,
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the bar chart shows a significant rise
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in
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the
birth
rate
to 2.7
million
and the
death
rate
went down to 1.1
million
.
On
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the
year
2025, the changes were similar to
of
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those of
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the
year
2005, where
birth
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the birth
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rate
increased more to 3.2
million
, and the
death
rate
reduced to 0.8
million
.
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  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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