The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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about the
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and
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rates in Switzerland from
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1970 to 2020 from United Nations statistics. The graph shown has 2 bar charts
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each
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throughout
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1975 to 2025.
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the picture, the red chart shows the
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rate
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, and the light blue chart shows the
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rate
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the country.
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1975, the starting
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, the
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rate
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displays
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1.2
million
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and the
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rate
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displays
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1
million
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the following years, the improvement
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stagnant
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1.7
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milion
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million
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birth
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the birth
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rate
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and 1.5
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of
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death
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the death
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rate
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by the
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1995.
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, 10 years later,
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year
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2005
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2005,
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the bar chart shows a significant rise
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the
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to 2.7
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and the
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rate
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went down to 1.1
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the
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2025, the changes were similar to
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those of
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the
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2005, where
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birth
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the birth
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rate
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increased more to 3.2
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, and the
death
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rate
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reduced to 0.8
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, year, rate, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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