More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reason for this? What are the solutions?

Nowadays,
people
are consuming more and more trash foods and
drinks
. A relevant problem in
this
topic is the increase of consuming sugar-based
drinks
.
This
essay will discuss the reasons for
this
phenomenon and, after, some possible solutions for
this
. In regard to the reasons,
firstly
, it can be highlighted the increase of highly processed food and fast food brands that
incentive
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incentivise
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people
to drink sugar-based
drinks
.
For example
, McDonald's and Burger King grew a lot
last
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in recent
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years.
Secondly
, another reason could be the extra good taste of it, that causes an
addction
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addiction
addition
to the consumers, because of
this
,
people
use to drink it daily.
For instance
, some
people
can´t spend a day without Coca-Cola.
Thus
, they are addicted to the taste of it.
Due to
the negative effects of
this
phenomenon, there are some solutions that can be taken to reduce it. One possible solution is trying to replace it with similar replacers,
for example
, soft sugared
drinks
could be replaced by sweet fruit juices, like apple juice. So, it is a healthy way to drink sweet
drinks
instead
of sugared
drinks
.
Moreover
, another solution is changing life habits,
for example
, with the help of nutritionists
people
can enjoy in better diet plan. Another point is that research shows us that doing exercises can enhance our neuroplasticity and capacity to introduce new habits.
Thus
, doing sports and following a diet plan can make
easier
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it easier
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to change the habit of drinking sugar-based
drinks
.
To sum up
, the growing trend of highly processed foods and
drinks
and the
addction
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addiction
addition
to
it's
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its
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taste are leading
people
to consume more and more sugar-based
drinks
.
However
, it can be solved by changing some habits in day to day.
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