The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The given charts
illustrates
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the progression of Australian international trade with multiple countries
such
as
China
, Japan, and
United
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the United
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States between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that Australia witnessed a trend of falling import
level
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levels
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in all countries.
Similarly
,
this
can be said to export
level
, with the exception of
China
which experienced a rise
at the end
of the period. Imports
level
generally started from around 20 billion dollars in 2004 for all countries. In the following three years, it saw no significant change
to
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the number.
This
is not for long
however
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, as 2007 marked a different scenario for
China
.
While
China
gradually increased to just below 30 billion dollars, there is hardly any noticeable positive climb for others.
China
eventually hit its peak at the same
level
,
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and continued with the same proportion as it was the year after, surpassing Japan and America by 10%. Exports
level
on the other hand
showed a more intriguing picture. At the beginning of the period,
China
scored
last
in terms of position. Yet, it gradually climbed by around 20% in the span of 5 years. Japan presented a more shocking fluctuation as it rose to just below 30% by 2005. The amount stayed relatively steady before it saw a drastic jump to around 40% in 2008.
This
number
however
plummeted by 10% in the following year. Regarding
United
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States, the number is stable with
slight
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a slight
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change in 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, level with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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