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Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment?

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It has been known for a long time that human beings need to limit everyday
energy
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use
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 and that
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environment
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the environment
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 needs to be protected.
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, it is
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 a fact that very few
people
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 actually take steps to improve the situation. There are several reasons behind
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, but if proper measures are taken
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 situation can be rectified. There are many factors responsible for the indifference towards the
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 among
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.
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 with,
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 are accustomed to the luxuries of life and it is very hard to switch back to a simpler life.
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, it is certainly impossible to go back to washing clothes by hand or to live without air conditioners or cars today.
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,
people
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 are not willing to make the changes because they prioritize their comforts over the
environment
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. Another reason is that
people
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 consider that their individual
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 would not make a big difference.
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,
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 think that environmental issues are too big to be resolved at the individual level and the only way to address these issues is at the government level.
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, some
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 are
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 of the opinion that environmentalists are exaggerating the consequences of climate change and global warming. They trust science to find them the solutions to these issues. Despite all these reasons, I still believe that many
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 can be encouraged to take steps.
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, the government can implement strict rules and regulations, which would ensure
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 efficiency in homes or
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use
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the use
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 of renewable
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 in homes.
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, many local governments pass large new residential building plans only if the plan incorporates solar rooftop panels. The second measure that governments from around the world can
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 is penalizing
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waste
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 or excessive
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 of
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by
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at
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 very high rates. Nothing would prompt a bigger reaction than a hit at
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’s pockets. In conclusion, there are many reasons for
people
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 not taking steps to safeguard the
environment
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 and to cut down their
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use
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.
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, I still believe that a lot of
people
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 can still be motivated to mend their ways.

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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to outline the main idea and make sure each paragraph focuses on a single point.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and a conclusion that clearly state the topic and your stance. This is present in your essay but could be further enhanced with a more engaging hook or final insight.
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Support your main points with specific examples that are not just hypothetical scenarios. References to actual statistics, studies, or case studies can make your arguments more convincing.
task achievement
Ensure your response fully completes the task. Address all parts of the prompt by discussing why many people don't follow environmental warnings and then offering concrete suggestions on encouraging them.
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When providing ideas or arguments, aim to develop them comprehensively by giving detailed explanations and how they connect to the overall topic. Avoid superficial discussion of points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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