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THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE PERCENTAGES IN TYPICAL MEALS OF THREE TYPES OF NUTRIENTS ALL OF WHICH MAY BE UNHEALTHY IF EATTEN TOO MUCH.

THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE AVERAGE PERCENTAGES IN TYPICAL MEALS OF THREE TYPES OF NUTRIENTS ALL OF WHICH MAY BE UNHEALTHY IF EATTEN TOO MUCH.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients #eatten
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The diagram compares information about the amount of three different nutritional
elements
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(
sodium
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, Saturated fat and Added sugar) which are included in
Breakfast
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,
Lunch
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, Snacks
as well as
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Dinner
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. Based on the information presented, most of the
Dinner
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meals
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 consist of higher amounts of both
Sodium
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 and Saturated fat.
However
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,
breakfast
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 is considered to be a healthier meal as it is the lowest consumer of
sodium
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, Saturated fat and Added sugar. As regards Soduim, both
Breakfast
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 and Snaks
meals
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 consist of only 14% of
Sodium
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elements
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.
In contrast
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, there was a sharply high number of
Sodium
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elements
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 inside
Dinner
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meals
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, 43%.
In addition
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, Around a third of the
sodium
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elements
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 go in
Lunch
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 foods.
Dinner
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meals
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 include the highest amount of Saturated fat, 37%. Less than a fifth of Saturated fat consumption in
Breakfast
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 foods(16%).
Furthermore
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, both Snacks and
Lunch
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meals
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 consume the same amount of Saturated fat(about 26% and 21% respectively). Eventually, snacks
are
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the
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tend to be
an unhealthy food
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unhealthy food
a portion of unhealthy food
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, because of the high consumption of Added sugar, which consists of about 42%.
Moreover
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, the rest
meals
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(
Breakfast
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,
lunch
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 and
dinner
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) share approximately the same amounts, between 16%, 19% and 23% respectively).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words elements, sodium, breakfast, lunch, dinner, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • average percentage
  • sodium
  • saturated fat
  • added sugar
  • unhealthy
  • intake
  • typical meals
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • snacks
  • contribute
  • health implications
  • convenience
  • taste preferences
  • cultural habits
  • balance nutrient intake
  • maintain a healthy diet
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