Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures? What measures should be taken to reduce this pressure?
Nowadays,
due to
high competition today's Children
are pressurized and face harder academic, social and commercial challenges. To examine this
issue this
essay will examine the problem and suggest some remedial measures.
In today's world, academic pressure
has increased significantly. Parents
want their children
to excel in every field in their academic career. Parents
teach their children
to score the highest grade in their studies when the child fails to score a high grade, they get stressed because they cannot meet their parents
expectations Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
For instance
, my friend was sent to the best school in the locality and he was informed by his parents
to score A grade in the last
year of school.
He tried his level best and when he received the results he was so disheartened and stressed that he could not meet the goal of his parents
. He was so depressed that he could not even do
eye contact with Verb problem
make
the
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his
parents
.
Social and commercial pressures also
put children
in dilemma. Social pressure
can sometimes create commercial challenges. social pressures are often related to peer pressure
.
In the childhood phase of life, children
want to have and do everything their friend
have even though that thing is not required of them. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
For example
, If the
friend Correct article usage
a
is having
the latest model of Wrong verb form
has
phone
Add an article
the phone
then
that will create social pressure
to have some model of phone. when they are unable to get these materialistic items, then
the commercial pressure
builts
on.
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builds
This
is the solution to every problem in the world. likewise
, even to
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with
this
problem, there are few solutions that can ease the children
's life. Firstly
, parents
should always have realistic expectations from their children
. Secondly
, parents
should teach their children
competition and cooperation simultaneously. lastly
, the competition should be healthy and should not compete to win at all costs.
Because of this
attitude even if a child is losing and falling they will not be disappointed, they will learn and improve from the failure and do better in life.
To sum up
, due to
tremendous Change preposition
apply
pressure
on children
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children,
it
is affecting Correct pronoun usage
apply
physical
and psychological health. Proper Steps should be taken by Correct pronoun usage
their physical
parents
and society to protect childhood.Submitted by shah64447 on
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