The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
park
's north entrance is located near Arnold Avenue,
whereas
the south entrance is close to Eldon Street. The
park
has a rose garden in the northwest that has never been destroyed since 1920. The
park
has changed since 1920 to the present day. Now, I will depict some differences between the two pictures. In the past, a stage was manufactured for musicians who were fans of art and music,
whereas
nowadays, a modern
amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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is built
instead
. In the old
park
, the seats were located around the
park
, but now they are concentrated in the
center
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around the central rose garden. Today's
park
is more pleasant for children because of a special children's play area.
Additionally
, the
park
's instructors pay attention to teenagers and have built a café for them
instead
of a rose garden. People can
park
their cars in an underground car
park
, but in the past, these facilities did not exist.
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Task Achievement
Provide a clearer overview of the main changes that have occurred from 1920 to the present, summarizing the overall trends rather than just listing differences.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Coherence and Cohesion
Include a brief introduction and conclusion to frame the essay. The introduction should paraphrase the question statement, and the conclusion should succinctly wrap up the points discussed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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