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In many countries wedding are getting bigger and more expensive than the past. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, large and expensive wedding
events
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 are increasing around the globe compared to the bygone days. In my view,
this
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 trend is a negative
developement
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development
 as ample reasons to
substatiate
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substantiate
 it. In
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 essay, I will explain my view with relevant illustrations. First and foremost, the bigger wedding
events
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 financial
burdern
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burden
 for
families
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.
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, the new
generation
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 wedding arrangements are becoming more expensive which would
couse
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cause
 serious financial
implication
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implications
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to
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for
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the
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apply
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families
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.
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, the marriage delay
in
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among
the
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apply
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young people in common compared to the past which may
effect
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affect
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to
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the
strecture
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structure
 of society.
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, younger people are living
together
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with out
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without
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 marriage on
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the increase
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increase
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the increase
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 in several
conuntries
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countries
 around the world.
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, the
teenegers
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teenagers
 commit
crime
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crimes
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such
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traffic
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trafficking
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 and robbing to arrange money for their wedding which should not be overlooked.
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,
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 expensive wedding are causing environmental problems. In detail, destination
wedding
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weddings
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 are increasing among the rich people. Using
the
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public spaces for
wedding
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weddings
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cause
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causes
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 environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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,
lexurious
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luxurious
 wedding
events
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 may cause enormous
amount
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amounts
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 of food wastage and plastic waste in destination wedding sites
such
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 as beaches.
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 may
effect
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affect
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the
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nature directly.
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, organising bigger
events
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are
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is
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 becoming difficult for
the
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apply
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families
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.
Arrangemnt
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Arrangement
 of accommodation and transportation for guests will be
burden
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a burden
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 for host
families
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. In conclusion, bigger wedding functions would not only cause financial instability but
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effect
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affect
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 the
enivironement
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environment
 sustainability. In my opinion, the wedding
events
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 should be simple and small.

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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that this idea is supported by specific examples or explanations. Adding more precise details or real-world examples can strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your sentences and paragraphs more effectively to improve readability. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence and proceed with supporting sentences that follow logically.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Mistakes in these areas can make the essay harder to follow and detract from your overall score. Consider proofreading more carefully or studying specific areas of English grammar to make fewer mistakes.
task achievement
To fully address the task, make sure to discuss both sides of the issue (positive and negative developments) and provide a balanced view if your position allows it. This will display a more complete understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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