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The graph below gives information about the percantage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosans ehere relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percantage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosans ehere relevant.
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paragraph
 gives information
the
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population
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 of several
country
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countries
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 in
asia
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Asia
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 between 1970 and 2020
along with
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 the data,
give
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giving
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 the predictions for
other
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the other
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 two decades. regarding
to
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apply
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the data,
Indonesia
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dan
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and
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Malaysia
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 rises
the
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apply
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population
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populations
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 every decade.
Malaysia
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start
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started
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 with
30
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a 30
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%
population
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,
the
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and the
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population
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 in
Malaysia
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has
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had
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significant
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a significant
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 increase in 1990 and will continue in future
around
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to around
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 80%.
Malaysia
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 will be the country
has
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that has
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 many
population
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 between
Philppines
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Philippines
, Thailand, and
Indonesia
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. similar to
Malaysia
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,
Indonesia
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 start
with15
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with 15
%
population
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gradually
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and gradually
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grow
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grows
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 every 10 years.
moreover
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, in 2000
population
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 of
Indonesia
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began
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begin
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begin to
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 rise
over
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by over
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 60% in 2040
as a result
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Indonesia
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place
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placed
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 in second position.
apart from
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this
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,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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expirenced
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experienced
 an up and down of
pupulation
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population
.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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begin
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began
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the
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a
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population
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less
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of less
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35
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than 35
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% in 1970.
nevertheless
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, in 1990 the
population
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 of
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the philippines
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philippines
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fall
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fell
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 down and will increase again in 2010 until 2040.
although
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,
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apply
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 the
population
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 of Thailand gradually increase every
decades
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decade
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 except in 1990 and 2000,
thailand
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Thailand
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 will be
the
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in the
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 lowest position among
Malaysia
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,
Indonesia
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, and
Phippines
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Philippines
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, indonesia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • percentage
  • trend
  • prediction
  • increase
  • decrease
  • urbanization
  • decade
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • plateau
  • demographics
  • forecast
  • socio-economic factors
  • metropolitan
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • infrastructure
  • developing country
  • industrialization
  • sustainable growth
  • census
  • statistical data
  • projection
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