The graph below gives information about the percantage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosans ehere relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percantage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosans ehere relevant.
the
paragprah
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paragraph
gives information
the
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on the
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population
of several
country
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countries
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in
asia
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Asia
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between 1970 and 2020
along with
the data,
give
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giving
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the predictions for
other
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the other
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two decades. regarding
to
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apply
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the data,
Indonesia
dan
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and
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Malaysia
rises
the
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apply
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population
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populations
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every decade.
Malaysia
start
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started
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with
30
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a 30
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%
population
,
the
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and the
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population
in
Malaysia
has
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had
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significant
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a significant
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increase in 1990 and will continue in future
around
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to around
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80%.
Malaysia
will be the country
has
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that has
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many
population
between
Philppines
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Philippines
, Thailand, and
Indonesia
. similar to
Malaysia
,
Indonesia
start
with15
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with 15
%
population
gradually
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and gradually
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grow
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grows
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every 10 years.
moreover
, in 2000
population
of
Indonesia
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began
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begin
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begin to
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rise
over
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by over
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60% in 2040
as a result
Indonesia
place
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placed
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in second position.
apart from
this
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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expirenced
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experienced
an up and down of
pupulation
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population
.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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begin
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began
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the
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a
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population
less
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of less
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35
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than 35
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% in 1970.
nevertheless
, in 1990 the
population
of
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the philippines
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philippines
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Philippines
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fall
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fell
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down and will increase again in 2010 until 2040.
although
,
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apply
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the
population
of Thailand gradually increase every
decades
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decade
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except in 1990 and 2000,
thailand
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Thailand
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will be
the
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in the
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lowest position among
Malaysia
,
Indonesia
, and
Phippines
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Philippines
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, indonesia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • percentage
  • trend
  • prediction
  • increase
  • decrease
  • urbanization
  • decade
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • plateau
  • demographics
  • forecast
  • socio-economic factors
  • metropolitan
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • infrastructure
  • developing country
  • industrialization
  • sustainable growth
  • census
  • statistical data
  • projection
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