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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar graph illustrates the
energy
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production
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 and consumption of the top 10 nations in 2014. It is evident that China and the United States were the largest
energy
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 consumers and producers,
while
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 Russia, Japan, and India
also
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 had significant
power
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 requirements. In 2014, China held the top position both in
energy
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production
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 and consumption, generating approximately 5500
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming a similar amount. The United States, ranking
second,
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produced and consumed nearly 20% less
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 than China. Russia stood as the third-largest
power
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 producer with a
production
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 of 1,057
billion
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kWh
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. Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany generated
power
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 ranging between 500 and 1,000
billion
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kWh
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.
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, the Republic of Korea had the lowest electricity generation, reaching only 485
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kWh
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. Notably, Germany was the only nation where
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 consumption exceeded
production
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. Despite being ranked seventh in terms of
power
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production
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, France and Brazil both generated and consumed the same amount, around 550
billion
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kWh
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 and 450
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, power, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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