The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
The chart shows how long the British
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telephone
call
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that are divided
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three types namely, local-fixed line, national and international-fixed line and mobile for all calls from 1995 to 2002 (
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in minutes).
Overall
, the local call had fluctuated movement
while
the other kinds of calls were slowly going up and it revealed that these two had
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. It can be seen that the local line was the most
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in the UK since the
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proportion
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was the biggest even in the beginning. It kept increasing until in the year of 1999, the time started to drop until
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the end of the period, and in
this
case, the number was almost the same
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the first year which was nearly 70 billion minutes.
On the other hand
, national
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international, and
mobiles
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were in
the
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similar patterns.
However
, the national and international numbers were larger than the
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ones which
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38% and 3% respectively.
The all
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calls jumped from less than 5% to nearly touch 40%
while
the international and
nasional
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national
types started from 38% to around 50%.
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