The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Although
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a certain impact
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daily life. I completely agree with the first statement that
science
must
be
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bring advantages for
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itself
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. It seems undeniable that
science
has created lots of
improvement
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in
people
's
live
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.
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is because
this
knowledge
help
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human's
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activity in many
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that
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leads to
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raise
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the
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standard of living. One of the
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that we might
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is the development of biology's field that helps
the
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humans to
recovery
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by the invention of medicine and even
surgary
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surgery
. Ultimately, without
those discovery
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, most mankind might easily
can
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not be cured and possibly.
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, there are some
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not think
science
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from the poor living that even go
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in
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hungry.
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money in real life and being careless with
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science
. Other than that, it is unlikely they get education exposure like school, in order to get
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science
, because of the financial distress. In conclusion, all of the theory and
dicovery
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discovery
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has
the
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pivotal role in
enhance
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human's
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live
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.
This
knowledge
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not only beneficial for those
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in
this
field but
also
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not care
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it.
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