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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of
healty
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healthy
 foods which were eaten by
famels
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families
, men and children in the UK from 2002 to 2010. In general, the consumption of
fruit
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fruits
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 and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 witnessed downup trend during the
last
 year . It can be noticed,
girls
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that girls
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 had the highest percentage of consumption of
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the mention
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mention
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mentioned
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 foods. It was around 25./. in 2002 and increased to 26./. in 2006 before
deaclined
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declined
 to 24./. in 2010.
While
,
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apply
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chlidren
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children
 were not
prefrred
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preferred
 to eat fruit and vegetable. it was only 11./. of children ate these
healty
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healthy
 foods in 2002 and it went up slightly to 18./. in 2006 . And in 2006 , it
decresed
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decreased
 reaching
to
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16./. in 2010.
Morever
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Moreover
, men consumed around 22./. in 2002 and witnessed the same trend
of
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for
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 women and children.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you have a clear introduction, body and conclusion. The introduction should paraphrase the task and present the overview, while the conclusion should summarize the main trends or points.
coherence cohesion
Develop clear and logical paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a central idea with relevant details supporting it. Try to use a range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task. Make sure to include comparisons, where relevant, and cover all the time-periods and categories given in the data.
task achievement
Use a range of vocabulary to clearly convey your ideas and make sure to present a comprehensive analysis of the data provided.
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Provide specific examples and data to support your descriptions of trends and comparisons. This will present a more detailed and accurate representation of the chart information.

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