The grash illustrates the proportion of the populatio in four countries (Philippines, Malaysia, Thailad and Indonesia) between 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of the population in four countries (Philippines, Malaysia,
Thailad
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Thailand
and Indonesia) between 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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, a glance at the graph reveals that
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beginning,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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was the first population country
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at the end
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of the
period
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it was lower than Indonesia and
malayasia
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Malaysia
.
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, The biggest increase belonged to Malaysia. In terms of Malaysia, it started at 30%
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it grew
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slightly
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just over 40% in 1990, followed by it saw a sharp rise
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a peak at
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80%, which was
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ahead
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of Indonesia
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experienced the same trend. It
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up gradually at just under 30%
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it was followed by
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increase at almost 60%. With regard to
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the Philippines
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, at
first
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it was higher than other countries
however
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in 2040 it was the third country considered to population. It increased at about 50%
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in 1990
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dropped significantly
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around 40% in 2010,
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furthermore
it reached 50% in 2040. The
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country
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to
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is Thailand
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remained stable from 1990 to 2020 at nearly 30,
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it increased considerably.
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Introduction/Conclusion
Make sure to have a clear opening paragraph that introduces the graph and a concluding paragraph that summarizes the main trends or findings.
Logical Structure
Ensure logical sequencing of information and clear paragraphing, with each paragraph focusing on one main idea.
Supported Main Points
Support main points with specific data from the graph such as exact figures and comparatives.
Complete Response
Fully address all parts of the prompt, ensuring that your response covers the trends from 1970 to 2040 for all countries.
Clear and Comprehensive Ideas
Clarify and enhance your ideas with precise language and no ambiguity. Avoid spelling errors (e.g., 'Thailad' should be 'Thailand', 'nigligibaly' should be 'negligibly', 'ferthurmore' should be 'furthermore').
Relevant Specific Examples
Use evidence from the graph to provide relevant and specific examples that support the statements you make about population trends.

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