The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over among the US, Sweden and Japan.

The line graph displays the percentage of population among the eldest people, who are over 65 years old between 1940 and 2040 years in three countries: the USA, Sweden and Japan.

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, the

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of seniors in Japan is dramatically lower, than in the other two countries,

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, the ending percentage in

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country is the highest. The elders in the US and Sweden are in almost equal proportion, their starting point was merely under 10% and approximately 7%, respectively.

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, their proportion significantly increased, despite a few drops through a 100-year period.

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, in 2040 Sweden's population of people over 65 will exceed more than the US's, up to 25%. The starting percentage in Japan was 5, in the next 60

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it decreased to about 2,5%. Afterwards, it slightly grew to 10%,

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, it is expected to markedly surge in 2030 to 25%.

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The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over among the US, Sweden and Japan.

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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