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The chart illustrates the percentage change in average house prices in New York, Madrid, Tokyo, Frankfurt and London by compared the average house prices in 1990 to 1995 and 1996 to 2002 with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart illustrates the percentage change in average house prices in New York, Madrid, Tokyo, Frankfurt and London by compared the average house prices in 1990 to 1995 and 1996 to 2002 with the average house prices in 1989.
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The bar chart shows the changes in average percentages of house
prices
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 in five different nations in 1990-1995 and 1996- 2002.
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, Tokyo is the only city
which
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in which
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 house
prices
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had
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were
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 minus average in
given
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the given
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 two time periods.London's
accomodation
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accommodation
prices
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were
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apply
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increased in
1996
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the 1996
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-2002 period. When it comes to
1990
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the 1990
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 -1995 category,
Only
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the Only
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 appreciated residences were in Madrid and
Fankfurt
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Frankfurt
 which
at
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were at
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 approximately 2% and 3% respectively.
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, Tokyo and London are the countries which had
high
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a high
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depriciation
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depreciation
 in
prices
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 of residencies considerably -7%. With regards to
1996
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the 1996
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-2002 field, New
york
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York
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 proved that their
accomodation
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accommodation
prices
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 were appreciated
into
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by
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 5%.
Morover
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Moreover
, residencies in Madrid cost 4% in that year category which increased by merely 1% than previous years.
And
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also
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prices
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 of houses in Tokyo appreciated by approximately 2%
while
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 Frankfurst
depriated
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reduced
 their
prices
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 by 1%.
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, London increased their house fee which changed significantly at 7%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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