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Lack of fresh is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome this problem?

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Today the scarcity of natural products is turning
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 be a
crusial
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crucial
 problem. In
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 essay, I am planning to discuss
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 issue, bringing a few possible consequences
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 could lead
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feasible solutions.
Firts
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First
 of all, I would like to point out the factor of economic impact on
agribuisiness
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agribusiness
 and farmers leading to higher prices and social inequality.
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, my country is
reach
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rich
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 in
appricots
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apricots
 with a delicious and unique taste. Since it is more profitable to export them, local consumers face the lack of
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 fruit in native markets.
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, people are forced to use processed products. Needless to say,
consumption
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 of
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 products can cause numerous health issues,
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 as obesity and heart
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disease
.
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, there
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a plenty
areas
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of areas
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 on our planet where
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shortage
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a shortage
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 of water it is almost impossible to grow fresh as much as necessary.
Food
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 scarcity in these areas leads to
malnutrituion
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malnutrition
 and famine. Talking about measures that could resolve the problem, I would like to note the promotion of urban gardening and vertical farming to increase local fresh
food
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production
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. Obviously, if people see the well-organized
food
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production
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 near the place they live, they would prefer buying
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food
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 to buying processed
food
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 from markets. To illustrate, my family like to buy apples and strawberries from the farms in our city. Another arrangement to improve
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unprocessed
food
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production
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 and adoption of water-efficient irrigation techniques to conserve water for crop
production
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.
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 could be efficient in drought areas. In conclusion, people need to consume
food
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 without any additives to avoid several health problems. Encouraging well-developed agriculture in cities with the introduction of various
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technologies could help to have sufficient quantities of
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 kind of
food
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development
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fresh produce
  • Sustainability
  • Desertification
  • Agricultural yields
  • Hydroponics
  • Organic farming
  • Food deserts
  • Aquaponics
  • Crop rotation
  • Climate change
  • Malnutrition
  • Food security
  • Subsistence farming
  • Genetically modified organisms (GMOs)
  • Agribusiness
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