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The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates fish and various
type
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types
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 of meat consumption in a city
on
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 Europe from 1979 to 2004.
In addition
, the data
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was measures
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measures
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 in
grams
 per person each week.
Overall
,
although
 the consumption of
chicken
was
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dramatically climbed in the whole period, the other features which are
beef
, lamb, and fish experienced a decline with some fluctuation. At
first,
chicken
 stood just under 150
grams
 which
were
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 in the third position
then
 it sharply grew until the end period of time.
As a result
, in 2004, the highest type of
meats
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meat
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 that was consumed by
European
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Europeans
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 was
chicken
.
In contrast
 with
beef
,
beef
 became the most favorable meat in 1979, but
then
 suddenly there was a considerable
dipped
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 that
made
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beef
located
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in the second position with a great difference from
chicken
.
On the other hand
, each person consumed lamb with 150
grams
 in a week in 1979.
However
,
this
consumptions
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consumption
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 moderately dropped until stopped at a little more than 50
grams
.
Lastly
,
unsignificant
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insignificant
 changes
experienced
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were experienced
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by
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in
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 the consumption of fish which
deacreased
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decreased
approximately
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by approximately
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 50
grams
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, chicken, beef with synonyms.
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